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Post by Oceanstorm Tue Mar 06, 2012 1:09 am

Here you can talk about our story ideas or we can comment or help another persons idea! Very Happy

Let the ideas begin!

Eagle.....you go first.......
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Post by Eagletalon Tue Mar 06, 2012 1:23 am

Um, okay. Just saying, it's a weird idea that needs a ton of fine tuning.

There are four kids who have are the human embodiments of the four seasons. They are aware that they can do stuff, but it's like controlling snow, leaves, causing plants to flourish, causing storms; they do it subconsciously or hide it. then, one day, one of the girls goes missing. All four were doing a science project together, so they try to find her. They allf all into a portal which takes them to a huge valley surrounded by mountains. Each quadrant of the valley is a different season. Tr north and south side of the mountains have a castle in the middle, one black one and one white one. Basically they try to keep the balance, yada yada stuff happens. It's a magic thing that's like Droon or something else I can't think of.
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Post by Oceanstorm Tue Mar 06, 2012 1:45 am

Wow....that is a cool idea! Very Happy

The girls could be Winter and Summer!
The boys could be um Leaf and George! Completely random that last one O.O
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Post by Eagletalon Tue Mar 06, 2012 2:03 am

George <3

Nah I thought about those names, but they were a little too obvious. Well, except for George. The things that imply season are last names. ex Max's is frost, obvious, but spring person's is Fiore, a little more concealed.
It's
Max=winter
Sam but o think I'm changing his name to Caden=autumn
Juliet=summer
Natalie=spring

and thanks, about the idea. I it it from a dream. However, I still need to improve the plot and I will find names for like "Seasonland" etc.


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Post by Oceanstorm Tue Mar 06, 2012 11:35 pm

When you were talking about the last names I had no idea what you were talking about.

I it it? LOL
You can do it! Maybe once you write it and stuff you can post it here! Very Happy

Ok so I need help with my idea. As I said there are different regions of the world that do all sorts fo different stuff (like districts but not as poor or as starved) And the magic groups live in one of regions, sometimes there will be more than one though I think. Anyway I don't know what magic groups to have! And what region they should be in! Here are the magic groups:

Wizards
Witches
Sorcerors
Enchanters
Alchemists
Shape Shifters
Warlocks
Thaumaturges
Conjurers
Pyromancer
Hydromancer
Geomancer
Aeromancer
Necromancer
Divinist
Magician
Theurgist
Druid
Shaman
Evoker
Sage
Illusionist
Abjurer
Fakir
Voodoo
Magus
Mage
Transmuter

Tell what ones to add, keep, delete or combine! Shocked

These are the regions:

Luxury Items
Military
Machines
Fishing
Power
Transportation
Clothing
Lumber
Farming
Livestock
Mining
Medicine
Building
Merchants
Cooks
Hunters
Storytellers
Scribes
Musicians
Seamstresses
Monks
Dancers
Scholars
Rangers
Bards
Fighters

Once again tell what ones to add, delete, or combine!

Also if you have any questions on what they do please tell me and I will answer them!
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Post by Eagletalon Tue Mar 06, 2012 11:49 pm

I think the four elemental groups should be far apart/in different regions of each other. Then, almost as the hub in the middle or main part, the witches and wizards. You might want to group the similar categories of magic users or closer together ones in a similar area, like people with different magics will fight more. (like fire and ice)

Regions:
Really? HG?
I don't get it. Is each thing like a town of the people? A manufactorer of the goods?
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Post by Oceanstorm Tue Mar 06, 2012 11:59 pm

Yeah, good idea Wink Do you think I should get rid of, change, add, or combine anyone of them?

Yeah, lol.
It is like a region with towns and cities all spread out. Like there will be a Capital of each region with towns spread through the rest of the region. I think I will be taking out Storyteller and Luxury Items, who needs those? And maybe some other ones...
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Post by Oceanstorm Sun May 06, 2012 9:56 am

I fixed my idea Smile
Each one of the magic groups has a city where they all live. These are just rough ideas as to be their city is to be, in general.

Magic Groups:
Sorceror-India
Enchanter-United Kingdom
Thaumaturge-
Conjurer-Egypt
Pyromancer-California
Hydromancer-Hawaii
Geomancer-Russia
Aeromancer-Arabia
Necromancer-Cape Horn
Theurgist-Northern Australia
Divinist-Tasmania
Shaman-Venezuela
Illusionist-Virginia
Abjurer-China/Japan
Evoker-Forbidden Magical Art
Voodoo-Forgotten Magical Art

The people of the region, mostly do that regions job but also have other jobs as well. The magical group/groups that are in that region rule over that region.

Regions:
Military-Poor, West Asia
Fishing-Poor, Oceania & Pacific
Lumber-Poor, North America
Textiles-Rich, South Africa
Farming-Richest, Australia
Livestock-Rich, Europe
Mining-Poorest, East Asia
Medicine-Rich, South America
Building-Poor, North Africa
Hunters-Poor, North America

And I already have the 1st story planned out in my head! Very Happy
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Post by Eagletalon Sun May 06, 2012 2:12 pm

nice! I find it interesting that you made farming the richest district, like the roles are flipped. Military is poor, for example.
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Post by Oceanstorm Sun May 06, 2012 2:17 pm

Yeah, I have the 1st story planned out for the most part. Like major characters and events. And some parts of the 2nd story. And I just came up with the idea for the 3rd world! Very Happy
The 3rd world is my favorite so far! They have special gases in the atmosphere that produce light and heat, since they have no sun. Plus, their world is like really really really old. But, they aren't that advanced. Their people are like dreamers....they dream a lot but they are too lazy and never go through with their dreams. Sad

I also have what the main characters look like.

What about your stories? Eagle? Shi?
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Post by Shi'ido Sun May 06, 2012 3:48 pm

It's great to see you posting your story eideas here. They certainly sound interesting and I think they have a good chance to get published at CreateSpace. Very Happy

Eagletalon, will the chapters be switching from pov's of the four characters? It seems like there could be many adventures you could do with them, haver you thought of villians? Are there any humans scientists who learn about them? Very interesting!

Ocean, your idea sounds pretty well thought out and complex. I love how you have all types of magic users and a planned economy. I think that could realy wok. Will there be main characters coming from each of the places, or one main character?

I'll post a whole lot about my book in a minute, but I'm going to let this post come through first, because I don't know if there is a limit to words in these posts.

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Post by Oceanstorm Sun May 06, 2012 3:55 pm

No word limit! I think....if so it must e very long, lol.

Thx, Shi! I feel so special!!!! Very Happy
lol

There are main characters from some of the regions but not all of them. Each magic group has their own friend and enemies, so I put the characters in different magic groups for diversity, but I had a figure out a problem that would draw them all together, so I went with the old murder...

Twisted Evil
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Post by Eagletalon Sun May 06, 2012 4:21 pm

Thanks Shi! I was thinking the first half of the story is Max's, the winter one, and then they are separated, so I'll change it to one to Fall to narrate the adventures he and Spring are having while Max had his, but write it after, but they are during the same time. The main pov throughout the story though is Max's.

For villains, I was thinking a good guy and a bad guy, but the good guy is actually bad...I didn't really know.
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Post by Oceanstorm Sun May 06, 2012 5:18 pm

What about Summer?

Like the bad guy pretends to be good to get close to them, and makes the good guys really seem like the bad guys?
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Post by Eagletalon Sun May 06, 2012 6:07 pm

Summer will be with Winter, and they'll travel to find the other two.

The thing with the good guy and bad guy is this:
The good guy finds them and tells them that the bad guy is destroying the "seasonland" thing because they go to a valley in another dimension which has all four seasons, etc. And so some land is dying. So the four go to the bad guy, but he says it is actually because the good guy is causing overbalance in power, so the balance of the valley is off. The good guy (who is actually the bad guy) wants to take over the valley. There is a thing were the good and bad guy automatically have their roles, but it's complicated.
And then the daughter of the good guy/actually bad guy kills both the good and bad guy and takes over. I love you
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Post by Oceanstorm Sun May 06, 2012 6:10 pm

Oh wow. How many books will there be? 4? One for each season?

Also, do any people live in Seasonland?
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Post by Eagletalon Sun May 06, 2012 6:50 pm

I don't know, I thought of doing side adventures, but then I wrote an epilogue, so I don't know.

The only people who live in "Seasonland" (seriously does anyone want to help with the name? Please?) are the two sides. There is a head and maybe an heir if they are training one. Oh, and also there is a lot of magic too. Nobody else lives in the place except animals, because the four Season people live in the real world.
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Post by Oceanstorm Sun May 06, 2012 7:01 pm

Who is the head and heir? Are they like people from our world?
And do the animals.....talk? LOL!!!

Ok...maybe you should post the story here one day!
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Post by Eagletalon Sun May 06, 2012 7:10 pm

uh...I was thinking of writing a book, so it would be like a hundred pages long....hopefully longer. would that work as a post?

The head and the heir are people from our world. There are three ways to become an heir:
which i am too lazy to explain right now. It's like blood-relation, have magic in them. something like that.

And no, Ocean. The animals do not talk. -__- Although the season people might be able to understand them or something?
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Post by Oceanstorm Sun May 06, 2012 7:13 pm

Okay!

Cool.

AWESOME!!!!
I I love you talking animals.
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Post by Eagletalon Sun May 06, 2012 9:04 pm

Lol. I can tell! You know, because this is an RP site for talking animals. XD

Okay, enough about mine! What about everyone else's?
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Post by Willowpoppy Mon May 07, 2012 5:35 am

Ummm....my idea?

Okay, there's this girl and she is an amazing artist. She almost always throws her work out because she has the habit of jumping at small noises. One random day she paints a picture of the sunset that has a big strip of purple in it by accident, so she chucks it in the bin. Later on, she falls and dislocates her shoulder and breaks her wrist too. She is taken to the hospital where she is given an operation and a new type of drug that is still in progress/testing. There are three others who have taken this drug too. The four get to know each other etc, then they realise something is weird. The girl's painting she had made was the exact shades and colour, down to the purple strip in the middle of the sunset on the 70th day after she had taken the drug.

Basically all four get powers, and save the world somehow.

Lol ideas?
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Post by Shi'ido Mon May 07, 2012 5:35 pm

Eagletalon, you asked for some new name suggestions. I think one thing that might help it sound unique would be to type down "Season" and translate it into Latin or Greek of any of the other ancient codes. That's just an idea.

Will, your idea sounds fun. It kind of reminds me of Max. Ride. Have you thought of villians for your story?

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Post by Oceanstorm Mon May 07, 2012 11:44 pm

I really like your idea Willow! Very Happy
Its very interesting. So I am guessing that the girls power is the ability to paint the future or something like that?
And what would be the others powers?

Season in Greek: Epochí
Couldn't find Latin, sorry Sad
But I did find Welsh!
Tymor
I remember you saying Eagle that Welsh looked like a code, so there ya go!
Also, land:
Latin-Terra
Greek-Gi
Welsh-Tir
Hope that helps, Eagle Smile

Anyway, Shi tell us about your story! Cave of the Bloodweb! Also, get you possibly get us a link to Createspace?
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Post by Eagletalon Tue May 08, 2012 12:53 am

Willow, your story sounds really cool! I wanna read it! Very Happy
Why 70 days later though? Does that number mean anything? WHOA is the girl's power to predict the future-or change it? that would be such a twist cyclops

Thanks for the idea, Shi! I do the translate thing already for my other story about the moon and stuff, but i didn't think about doing it with this one. I got latin:
Temporum! So maybe Temporumtir. And yes, Welsh looks like a code and is awesome! I kinda want to learn it now.

Oh yeah. What about your book, shi? Is it about...spiders? Smile
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Post by Willowpoppy Tue May 08, 2012 4:23 am

Yeah the main girl can paint the future and the others i havent decided what powers they get.

Lol 70 days was a random number :3

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Post by Jaybird Tue May 08, 2012 10:10 am

-jumps in randomly-

My story:
It's like the second series of a series where I dunno what happens in the first series yet *facepalm* and it's like the... Second book or something.
Lol, second series, second book.

It's something like there's this land called the Highlands high up in the sky and it's made up of many different colonies which each specializes in something different. There's a land down below, Rieviera. The Highlands has been destroyed...
Or so they think. There was a war long ago where almost all civilization where wiped out from the Highlands. About five percent survived, and lives in Rieviera though they don't know it. This one is about where suddenly where Rievierans realize that there are Highlanders among them, and they're on the brink of war before something happens...
Though I have no idea what. xD
A breif history of the Highlands:
They are somewhat like warrior cats, border stuff, but less hostile, before there was a civil war. In the war, a fire spell went wrong, and the whole battle field was ignited. Half of the population died. Half of the half went into shock/eventually died. There was only half of the half of the half left, and then the Rievierans decided to launch an attack on the Highlands. Half of the half of the half were gone, in the end, there were only a few thousand people remaining total. After that, the Highlanders never fought ever again, until a few thousand year later when all of Rieviera (Rieviera is divided too) attacked the Highlands again where they were totall unprepared, and so, most of the civilization was gone.

... Lol, not brief at all. That's all I have so far, and I'm stuck.
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Post by Oceanstorm Tue May 08, 2012 4:45 pm

Maybe for your story Willow, after 70 days of taking the drug for each one of the kids, their power can be revealed???
And like the doctors/scientists that gave them the drugs could be the villians and made the drug to give people super powers, but since they just made it, they tested it on random kids to see if it would work...
so now they know it works, they are going to use the drug on themselves to give themselves superpowers and take over the world!!!!!
MWUHAHAHAHAHA!
Oh.....sorry. And kids have two choices A. Join the scientists and take over the world or B. Die
But they choose to fight! Choice C all the way!!!! Very Happy

For your story, Jay it is very interesting! I like it!
Maybe the Highlands have some special trademark that makes them stick out from the Rieviera's....like purple eyes! I I love you purple
And they could have like powers and stuff and they like need to find each other because the Rieviera's are trying to kill them all off and they need to unite and survive and stuff! Yeah!

But, then again, why would they want to kill them....hmmm...
The first series, btw, could be like the war and the ancestors of the main characters of the 2nd series! Very Happy
I I love you ancestors

Eagle, if you learn Welsh, I learn Welsh! Also, I like the name Temporumtir! Cool and epic sounding....

Also, I think Shi's story is about another dimension. But truthfully, that is all I know Sad
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Post by Eagletalon Tue May 08, 2012 7:48 pm

Lol, Willow. Why don't you make it more direct, like next day: Sunset: "Wha???"
What kind of powers will the other people have? I know you haven't decided the rest, but what kinds? Like all psychic powers or physical ones too?

Ocean, your idea for Willow's is sort of......with the scientists and all....Maximum Ride anyone? (Although without the flying thing of course) tongue if you feel offended, think of it as payback for scarring me for life! Mad

lol it's funny, with Highlanders, beacuse that's the name of my local high school.
So what are you stuck on, Jay?
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Post by Oceanstorm Tue May 08, 2012 10:08 pm

....Maybe the scarring will prevent you from doing bad things?
EX. Stabbing, cheating, etc, etc, etc.....
lol!
Wink

I know my idea is kinda Maxium Ride. But I have never read the books, but I do know what it is about though.

GO HIGHLANDS! Very Happy
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Post by Shi'ido Wed May 09, 2012 7:08 pm

Sorry all! I was logged out and had been going places today. I'm back now. pirat

Interesting idea Jay. I''ll try to think of something. scratch

Yep, my story is (partly) in another dimension. To push aside some things that I changed now, there's been an update. "Cave of the Bloodweb" is actually the second book. I think I might have accidentally called it the first. lol! Probably because that's the one I'm writing now.

Anyway, there are two central characters: Paul and Myrtle. Paul is your typical teen aged boy, when the book starts he is 17. There is a flashback to when he had visited this place at the age of ten. At an early age he discovered a mysterious grove of trees with lights shining out of it. This is at a national park. He entered the grove and was surprised to find that it was as if he had entered a MUCH taller and wider grove, because the space inside is bigger than the space outside. Mysterious crystals are growing from the branches in the way that fruits grow from normal trees. His visit is brought to a quick end when a strange man attacks him and demands to know where the "Gifted Immune" is. He is rescued by another man whom he never itentified. Now, it is the presnt time, back to when he is 17. He has the chance to meet the man who rescued him, and the man tells him that he is the "Gifted Immune". He goes on to explain that the grove is a portal to another place, not so much another planet as another dimension. In the other world, people are not as advanced as people are in the 21st century. Also, humans are not the only race, though they are one of the most common ones. There is a place in the other world known as "Candledeath". Candledeath is a stretch of dead land miles wide that no one can enter without being killed instantly. The reason for this is because there is magical weapon in the center, the thing which killed all life in the first place and continues to kill anything in that area. Leaders in the other world have ordered their best scholars and wizards to find a way to enter Candledeath and take the weapon out without being killed. The villian is someone who plans to actually use it again. The villian has learned that the weapon has an opposite, an artifact that can RESTORE life. The only person that the deadly weapon can't harm is the person who made the good artifact. And of course, he happens to be Paul's grand-father. Now, the villians want to capture Paul to force him to retrieve the weapon. In the meantime, the other central character has been sent to protect the Gifted Immune. She is a Nylwyn, from a race which can live in the water as wll as land.

The titans are the race who dominates the other place and who want the weapon the most.

And yep, there are a few talking animals. lol!

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Post by Eagletalon Wed May 09, 2012 7:17 pm

OMG that was amazing! I want to read it! are you going to publish it or something?!
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Post by Oceanstorm Wed May 09, 2012 9:32 pm

I think he already has the first book out. And now that I know the plot, I want to read it! Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy study

Can you link us to where we can get the book/s?

I really like the idea! It is so cool!
I won't ask you any questions, because if I get the book, they will all be answered Wink

TALKING ANIMALS! YEAH! YEAH! YEAH!
ANIMAL POWER!
cat monkey pig rendeer elephant Thinking

lol!
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Post by Jaybird Thu May 10, 2012 8:53 am

Lol, I got the name Highlands from...
Um, a song? Lol.

Thanks, Shi!
Oh, that sounds cool. Very cool.

To say, I am stuck on... Everything. The main characters, how it starts, what happens, how it ends.
/shot
I am hopeless.

And yeah, Ocean, the Highlands are different. They all of like weird color eyes (purple, night sky blue, orange, gray, etc.) Yes... That's a good idea! About their ancestors... Maybe I can start off at the war part, where the Highlands were supposedly destroyed.
Hmm, part of the second book can be told from the perspective of a Highlander, and the other have a Rievieran, I think...
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Post by Oceanstorm Thu May 10, 2012 12:31 pm

Well, for the main characters, it depends on how many Highlanders you want to be alive. 9, 20, 7, etc. Once you have that number down you can begin to think of your main characters.
Oh! IDEA! <hahaha that is like my trademark, now Wink

How about there was a prophecy given to the Rievierans that if they did not kill off all the Highlanders, the Highlanders would kill them all of or all of the Rievierans would die?
LOL, I always spell Rievierans, Riverians Laughing

And for the starting point you could show the Highlanders living their normal life with the Rievierans. But then the Rivierans find out that there are still Highlanders and try to kill them so, the Highlanders have to escape and like try to survive, as well as find the other Highlanders.
And maybe the Rievieran main character could be like good and trying to help them. Or the opposite. Or bad then good! Wink
lol
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Post by Shi'ido Fri May 11, 2012 8:53 pm

Jay, exactly how magical are th people of the Highlands? Is it something natural to them, or do they have to learn it?

And thanks everyone for the comments on my book. Very Happy The first one is at CreateSpace. I am trying to link from here to there. CreateSpace has some regulations that its authors have to follow, but the link should be ready in a week. Very Happy In the meantime, maybe I should post the first chapter on this sitee?

Ocean, I have all the animals you pt in your post in the book except the pig lol! They all can talk. Hmm...maybe I should add a pig in book two. In book two they chase a elf girl and a pirate girl.


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Post by Oceanstorm Fri May 11, 2012 9:04 pm

Posting the 1st chapter of your boil on here would be great! Smile

Why will the link take such a longish time?

Normally, I would ask why they are chasing an elf girl but once I get the book I will find out!

TALKING ANIMALS! YEAH!

Hehehe a talking pig would be funny...it is not a normal talking animal...
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Post by Shi'ido Fri May 11, 2012 9:07 pm

Oceanstorm wrote:Posting the 1st chapter of your boil on here would be great! Smile

Why will the link take such a longish time?

Normally, I would ask why they are chasing an elf girl but once I get the book I will find out!

TALKING ANIMALS! YEAH!

Hehehe a talking pig would be funny...it is not a normal talking animal...

Sure, I'll have the chapter up tommorow.

The reason why it is hard to link is that it seems the link expires after a set number of hours. CreateSpace has a round the clock switch. I am going to send them an email explaining that I need a steady link.

LOL, the only thing I'm saying is that the elf girl isn't happy about it!

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Post by Oceanstorm Fri May 11, 2012 10:31 pm

Great! Very Happy

Hmm....why do they do that, though? confused

LOL Laughing
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Post by Jaybird Sat May 12, 2012 7:56 am

Yes, I'm thinking about everything now.

So I have no idea about whatsoever, and I'm stuck.

Hmm, good idea, but I was thinking about somewhere along the lines where...
Well, I forgot. Embarassed


Shi, I'm not sure yet, because I did not forget..
No, I forgot that too. x_x I'm sorry. Embarassed
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Post by Shi'ido Sat May 12, 2012 11:01 am

I'm not sure exactly why CreateSpace does it. I know that the link would remain steady in Amazon. The reason is because Create Space is owned by Amazon, so they allow steady links within their own sites. If I had to guess why they expire links in other sites is to prevent pirating. Still, all I have to do is ask for permit to send the link here. Don't worry, it will be up in a few days. But today I can post the first chapter here.

Jay, that would be something interesting you could decide. Maybe what sets the main characters apart from the other Highlander's is their ability to do magic? Just an idea. Smile


EDITED: By the way, before when I said that the animals chase an elf girl, I didn't literally mean a girl. She's a teenage [irate girl.

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Post by Oceanstorm Sun May 13, 2012 10:35 pm

Can't wait for chapter & link! Very Happy

That is a good idea, Shi. For Jay's story, I mean Smile

I thought so. OINK! pig
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Post by Shi'ido Mon May 14, 2012 7:00 pm

Oceanstorm wrote:Can't wait for chapter & link! Very Happy

That is a good idea, Shi. For Jay's story, I mean Smile

I thought so. OINK! pig

I got a reply from Create Space! sunny They say that they will enable a steady link soon. A few other authors also requested steady links, so I'm in line. But I'm number 9 on the list, so it will be soon. I'll post the chapter tommorow.

pig ??? Huh?

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Post by Oceanstorm Mon May 14, 2012 7:04 pm

Hooray! For chapter and link! Very Happy

I don't know. I just did a pig since you said you might make a talking pig, lol.
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Post by Shi'ido Mon May 14, 2012 7:06 pm

Oceanstorm wrote:Hooray! For chapter and link! Very Happy

I don't know. I just did a pig since you said you might make a talking pig, lol.

lol! I thought that you were giving a hint that it would be a good idea for a pig to chase the girl.

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Post by Oceanstorm Mon May 14, 2012 7:09 pm

Hahaha, That would be funny.

But I don't think an elf (girl or teenager) would be afraid of a pig....

Laughing
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Post by Shi'ido Mon May 14, 2012 7:11 pm

Oceanstorm wrote:Hahaha, That would be funny.

But I don't think an elf (girl or teenager) would be afraid of a pig....

Laughing

Yeah, she wouldn't. lol! She would be angry. But she'd probably run if it was with a Thinking cat monkey elephant

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Post by Oceanstorm Mon May 14, 2012 7:15 pm

Hmmm....cats, monkeys, and elephants can be scary.

But most of the time, they are peaceful.

I hope Wink
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Post by Shi'ido Mon May 14, 2012 7:17 pm

Oceanstorm wrote:Hmmm....cats, monkeys, and elephants can be scary.

But most of the time, they are peaceful.

I hope Wink

Yeah, they are peaceful. But she is a pirate elf and the animlas are supposed to find the pirates. It is a all-woman pirate gang, so it's new.


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Post by Oceanstorm Mon May 14, 2012 7:18 pm

......Oh. I see.

Well then. I guess I just found out why Paul and Myrtle are chasing the elf then!

...And why a pig and other talking animals would want to chase her too! Very Happy
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